Still playing Tag

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Yesterday NY got creamed by a blizzard. So I spent my day shoveling and there’s still more to shovel. I also loaded up the more epic version of   Curse Breaker: Enchanted into a voice reader app and gave it a listen. I kept in mind our discussion about tag lines and the disjointed synopsis I took a stab at in yesterday‘s post. Know what happened?

I heard spots where I could reinforce the tagline with the story and also, parts I could slant a little differently to make it more epic and to support the synopsis. Sitting down to write up a summary of the book got me thinking about what exactly is at the story’s heart and what the major story threads are. So I’m grateful we’re taking this journey together. You are helping me a lot by forcing me to think globally. It’s so easy to get caught up in the details and lose the wider perspective. So I’m going to keep plugging on that–let’s call it a refinement–after I go throw some snow around.

As for taglines, I love Mandy’s suggestion about shortening it to “when magic turns to murder…” But it sounds like an incomplete thought. Taglines, at least the ones I’ve seen, are usually compete sentences. So I’ve been thinking about this:

When magic turns to murder, who will speak for the dead?

That’s what Sarn wrestles with. It doesn’t help that the ghost haunting him is mute.

Ok I’m off to shovel snow. I leave you to ponder whether that works as a tagline. I agree yesterday’s version reminded me of the ghostbusters.

Have a good one.

5 thoughts on “Still playing Tag

  1. You might be right but sometimes when we use phrases or expressions they are more like dialogue or what people might say wonder/say in life rather than being something which has to be grammatically correct. I do find myself more drawn to the phrase with the ellipses, it allows the reader to wonder and you’re right. It does seem to look better with the . . .😊

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  2. I think you don’t even need those eplises cause that’s what makes it feel incomplete. Just like:

    “When Magic Turns to Murder.” Complete with thought 🙂

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  3. I agree with Mandi’s suggestion about shortening it to just “when magic turns to murder…” I’ve seen taglines that trail off in ellipses and it helps not to have too much writing on the cover to distract the reader.


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