The Bloodcrow
Through an aperture, he saw the Bloodcrow
sift through the bodies scattered on the track.
Dread hammered nails in his apathy, sowed
a frantic beat in his veins, magic jacked…
“Papa, wake up. You’re having a bad dream.”
Small hands patted Sarn’s face, empyreal
radiance cut ‘cross the scene in green beams.
His magic threw the dream, reached for the real.
Ran pancaked into a relieved embrace.
Sarn blinked away that dream but its presence
lingered like a whalebone in a back brace–
still pressing its unwanted influence.
“Why you not have good dreams?” Ran still held tight.
“‘Cause fanatics did bad things in my sight.”
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Follow Sarn’s Advent journey. It begins in the Curse Breaker Saga and you can check out related vignettes starring him on my Holiday page (for the Anvent sequence) and my Tales of Shayari page for non-holiday related misadventures.
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Inspired by Mindlovemisery’s Menagerie Wordle #88
To witness what happens in the world; can any one avoid nightmares?
We are generally too hard on ourselves. Thankfully we have others who help tell us otherwise.
Yes we are too hard on ourselves. Thank you for reading
This caught my eyes. All three of them. 🙂
Thank you 🙂 it was a great prompt.
I might have to try this Wordle thang.
They are really fun because of the mixed bag of words. Wordles have introduced me to all kinds of new words, like Bloodcrow.
“Magic jacked” .. I love that usage! A very visual and intriguing piece. Enjoyed the characters very much.
Your poem is awesome, Melinda. 🙂
Thank you, Sarn is my fav character, so he and his son have many posts dedicated to their antics.
Excellent poetry! Your command on words is getting stronger each day and the tales you weave, more addicting. The imagery the word “Bloodcrow” invokes, accompanied by the spectacular visual is a treat for the readers! 🙂
Thank you, the word “bloodcrow” came from a wordle and I’m grateful for the prompt. I’ve learned new words from them
Wonderful! Learning only enriches you☺️
Yes! I look forward to Mondays fur the new wordle. 🙂
I wish I could make good use of prompts. I am not very good with them. I almost always write randomly, without discipline.
That’s okay too, especially if the prompt prompts you to go in a different direction 🙂 those surprises are what keep me hooked on them
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Oh my.. so intense!!! Loved it! You go head on and I like that!
P.S. great prompt by the way for day 2. I am glad yours got picked/heard.. however that works 😀
Thank you on both counts. I chose reflections because they fascinate me. I didn’t even think of magic which is funny considering I spend all my time writing about it 🙂
Ah, great write, Melinda 🙂
Thank you it was a great prompt
you are welcome…yes, it fits perfectly with your ‘world’ 🙂
Yes it does. I’m adding the bloodcrow to my book and this entire sequence. It fits and fills in a hole I didn’t see
That is awesome…such is the power of writing 🙂
Yes it is. Prompts have opened many windows into the narrative exposing details that I had missed. I have added many things to the books thanks to prompt responses 🙂 I am incredibly grateful for that.
🙂 that is wonderful, Melinda!!
Yes it is. 🙂
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This feels very real after all that has happened here and around the world. Everyone must be having bad dreams. Wonderful job with the words and this poems!
Thank you 🙂
I love this! Different is good! I really like how it flows and kept me captivated. Reread it several times!
Thank you 🙂 I write exclusively in this style and I generally write about Sarn and his son. Feel free to read more if you like my style.
Sarn is starring in my Advent series as well, which you can find here: http://melindakucsera.com/poetic-holidays/
and there’s a full list of his vignettes on my Tales of Shayari page, his stories are under the Curse Breaker heading:
http://melindakucsera.com/tales-of-shayari/
I will definitely check back with your blog.
Thank you!
Wow ! Great take on the prompt. Now i’m hooked and want to know everything about Sarn 🙂 .
I have a lot of stuff about him since he’s the protagonist of my fantasy series, which I hope to publish to kindle in 2016. He’s starring in my Advent series as well, which you can find here: http://melindakucsera.com/poetic-holidays/
and there’s a full list of his vignettes on my Tales of Shayari page, his stories are under the Curse Breaker heading:
http://melindakucsera.com/tales-of-shayari/
I have a lot of stuff about him since he’s the protagonist of my fantasy series, which I hope to publish in 2016. He’s starring in my Advent series as well, which you can find here: http://melindakucsera.com/poetic-holidays/
and there’s a full list of his vignettes on my Tales of Shayari page, his stories are under the Curse Breaker heading:
http://melindakucsera.com/tales-of-shayari/
Oh Melinda, this is so good. Intense feeling and power! I’m glad you wrote more!
Thank you! Oh I wasn’t passing this one up. The muse had its claws too deep in it. I just wasn’t sure when I’d write. If was never in doubt.
That’s a good relationship with your muse. 🙂
We engage in a lively tug of war over prompts and the muse usually wins 🙂
LOl!
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Wow! Wow! Wow!
Really? I was just reading the others who participated and I was feeling like my effort lacked some of their luster. Perhaps I am being to critical of myself. I wrote 14 consecutive vignette/sonnets for advent over the weekend. Maybe that’s coloring my view. I don’t know but I love wordles. Thank you for the great words! Some I have never heard of. 🙂
I did not find your entry lacking at all, I thought it was fantastic you are being too hard yourself. A few days ago I was writing up a frenzy and now I just feel meh about everything I write. I love them too!
Thank you! I’m glad to hear that a ‘meh’ stage follows intense writing. I feel better now. Thanks!
You will be back to ferocious in no time, this is just part of the growth spurt haha
Oh good. You’ve set my mind at ease